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 Post subject: Desmond Rex ¶ 1
PostPosted: 27. Oct 2010, 02:12 
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Summary: Vampire Genesis -- A vampire is born.
Rating: M
Genre: Fiction
Warning: Suicide may cause immortality!


At dusk on the thirteenth night after his death, Desmond stirred deep within his own chest cavity, in the space where his heart used to be. At that time he did not know where he was or why, or even what he was; he knew only that he was desperately hungry. He turned and twisted inside the corpse, looking for a passage out. Finding none, he bit, sliced and ripped through a brittle lung, then squirmed through the trachea to the larynx, then to the epiglottis, then to the mouth. With the long claws on his thumbs and toes, he pried open the corpse's teeth and lips enough to force his nose and head through, then pushed and pulled his lean, furry body out of the mouth of the corpse and into the vast blackness of the coffin.


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 Post subject: Re: Desmond Rex ¶ 1
PostPosted: 27. Oct 2010, 02:43 
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Oh, I certainly liked it! Please post more, this really sounds interesting. :shock:

But may I remind <ou to read through the guidelines. Every writer is asked to put up a summary, genre, rating and warnings (if needed). Please do this. Thank you! ;)


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 Post subject: Re: Desmond Rex ¶ 1
PostPosted: 29. Oct 2010, 02:44 
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"Chapters of the same fiction may not be submitted as separate topics! All chapters must be grouped together in their respective topic." Quote form the Guidelines!!!

Summary: Vampire Genesis -- A vampire is born.
Rating: M
Genre: Fiction
Warnings: Beware! Suicide may result in immortality!


Using his wide pointy ears, upturned snout, and various hairs and whiskers on his head and body, Desmond recorded the locations, dimensions and composition of the walls, floor and ceiling of the coffin. Then he stretched his long, webbed arms and fingers, and with his leathery wings thus outstretched, he flipped himself up to the ceiling and grasped the cloth lining with his claws. While hanging there, he slashed the lining with his teeth and began gnawing vigorously at the oak lid of the coffin.


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 Post subject: Re: Desmond Rex ¶ 1
PostPosted: 30. Oct 2010, 23:53 
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 Post subject: Re: Desmond Rex ¶ 1
PostPosted: 1. Nov 2010, 03:41 
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That was short, but really awesome! :shock:


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 Post subject: Re: Desmond Rex ¶ 1
PostPosted: 1. Nov 2010, 04:10 
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I've put up your fiction in the archive. Take a look at it!


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 Post subject: Re: Desmond Rex ¶ 1
PostPosted: 2. Nov 2010, 01:48 
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Liked it. Definitely good imagery and nice choice for words. More plot may have been prefferred, but for what it was it was good.


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